Do It! Make A Replacement Poem

Poem I’m Replacing:

“A Clear Midnight” by Walt Whitman

THIS is thy hour O Soul, thy free flight into the wordless,
Away from books, away from art, the day erased, the lesson done,
Thee fully forth emerging, silent, gazing, pondering the themes thou
lovest best.
Night, sleep, death and the stars.

It’s Parts Of Speech:

PRONOUN verb determiner noun Interjection Noun, determiner adjective noun preposition determiner adjective,

Adverb preposition noun, adverb preposition noun, determiner noun verb,

determiner noun verb,

Pronoun adverb adverb verb, adjective, verb, verb

determiner noun pronoun

noun adverb.

Noun, noun, noun conjunction determiner noun.

My Replacement Poem:

“Mind in Flight”

THAT isn’t thy hour HOLY Cow, thy obstructed flight away every abruptness,

Later into nooks, later into part, the way traced, the reason none,

Thee naturally forth purging, compliant, raising, monitoring the dreams thou

loathest most.

Fright, weep, breath and the recovery.

How I Arrived At This Poem:

I’d say that my replacement poem is random for the most part, but it does have an undertone of sadness. The lines describe the obstacles a person can face in their mind and the eventual recovery. I would say that my whole replacement poem overall was “free writing.” I also was trying to keep up with Walt Whitman’s vocabulary from “A Clear Midnight.”